So today I submit a treatise on pace
Your stories may ebb and your stories may flow
But how do you tell when to rush or go slow?
Cadence depends on your goals for a scene
Such as hatred or passion or feelings between
Shorten your phrasing for action and fights
But shake out Roget’s for fanciful flights, of love… of love… of wonderful, lovingful, chummingful love…
Go charging ahead with hard-rocking words
Like rockets and rackets and thundering herds
Then slow with the gentle of feathers and fluff
With kisses, caresses, and mushyful stuff
This poem may be poor, but you shouldn’t be sore
Based on the price that you paid at the door
Something for nothing is something said I
And it far exceeds herpes or a stye in your eye
What's your cadence?
Munk’s run-on opening line,
After changing his name to Jack, Jake married Jill, but Jill ended up liking Jake better so she divorced him, Jack that is.
Munk's "Opening Line" is yours to keep, use it. Munk
Did everyone read Suze’s post regarding rejection over at Analog Breakfast this week? Loved it.
This week's music Nancy Sinatra--These Boots are Made for Walkin'
22 comments:
I'd love to hear Nancy shake your verse.
I mean, swing it like a sequined skirt.
I mean, sing it like the truth it shows,
That cadence is the soul of prose.
Money.
What Michael said.
Someone's been hitting the wine again. Cheers to that!
I might even get all mushyful over this. But those aren't tears. I just have a stye in my eye.
'But shake out Roget’s for fanciful flights'
!
'This poem may be poor, but you shouldn’t be sore
Based on the price that you paid at the door'
:)
'What's your cadence?'
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@MC-Swing it like a sequined skirt... great.
@MO-for nothin'
@dbs-What I said after Michael said what he said.
@LG-No wine involved, just a bleary eyed, late-night post. Cheers to you, hope that stye gets better.
@Suze- ...---...---...---...---...---...
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A poem about writing that includes a herpes mention? That is all kinds of awesome.
Good. Your poem is so much better than herpes that I'm not sure you can even compare them.
Seriously, awesome.
I liked your poem. You need to do some more, I think. Anytime the word "chummingful" can be used in a verse, then something rather unusual (read: magical, possibly deranged, but mostly entertaining) is going on.
And once more you've taught me new words. :-)
I liked the poem and you are correct, it is far better than herpes.
You're a world class rhymer, my friend. I thought this was awesome but can't really say if it's better than herpes. I don't have the herp or know anyone who is open about having it, so for all I know herpes is super awesome and everyone who has it gets to go to a huge herpes pizza party every Friday night.
@Suze ~>
@MS-replace the "p" with an "o" and you've got heroes.
@RW-Good.
@LK-I like Chumming Birds too.
@KCW-Follow dbs for more new words, he's the master. I especially liked "ragey".
@LH-super nice of you to say.
@A-I prefer "rhymer" over "poet" any day. Also, I'm not in marketing, but I suspect that "herpes pizza" could be a tough sell.
Something for nothing is something indeed
Especially for a poor writer in need.
Because when your book's middle is quicksand
You'll need a new character or conflict at hand.
Words light lightning, soar and then crash
And your quicksand middle will dry up in a flash.
How about that rap song that rhymes bestest with asbestas(sp)?
Love your cadence poem by the way and of course the humor too.
@RK-ain't she sweet... lovely poem
@TDR-the very bestest.
:notworthy:
I'm so not good at poetry, but I loved the pacing of yours.
And that song really takes me back. Nancy really only had one hit, but it was a fun one.
This is awesome, proving once again, you are the man.
Haha! Fabulous! There is something about the cadence and diction of your lively poem that reminded me of the late, great Dr. Seuss.
Good mushyful, chummingful stuff!
Can you illustrate, too? ;)
you keep samin when you outta be changing... :D
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